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Love was paper kisses;

Beneath lyrical oaks

We cut the strings

On cellophane kites.

           d

      g         r

  n                  i

      i          f

           t

       f

          o

             r

          e

           v

          e

          r

 

 

Sometimes kites get tangled in the trees, but sometimes they just fly away.
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Beautiful
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sioranth Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you and thanks for the fave, too. :)
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Your Welcome.
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LegolasPanther Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
An Epic/Ultimate Fave! :heart:
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sioranth Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! :squee:
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LegolasPanther Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :heart: :-)
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Student Writer
Brilliant concrete poetry, but what are the "d, n, g" in the kite meant to say?
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sioranth Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I had to go double check this because I thought maybe I typo'ed something. The kite starts at the top and reads to the right, following around to read 'drifting.' Maybe it's rendering oddly on your screen?
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Student Writer
I noticed that bit, but I was wondering if the letters on the left top of the kite made any kind of message? I'm guessing not, but I want to make sure
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sioranth Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Nope, the northwest edge of the kite is just the 'ngd' from 'drifting.' :)
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Student Writer
Hum, fair enough. Thanks for clearing that up :3
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AzureNebulae Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely. There's nothing I like more than visual poetry that has been arranged so it is relevant to the theme. I really like the poem overall - thought-provoking and makes the readers ask themselves questions. <3
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sioranth Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :) Thank you for the fave, too. 
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AzureNebulae Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I seriously love it :clap:

You're welcome <3
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sioranth Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This was my first time trying my hand at something like this, so I'm glad it's making a favorable impression on people and I don't have to hide in shame. lol
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AzureNebulae Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aww of course. It is definitely really good :) <3
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Student Writer
The format for this is really cool, and I like the image you portray. :heart:
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sioranth Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks very much (and thanks for the fave)! 
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome !
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